Sunday, 28 August 2011

ujmbled

Ok! I've had the idea for this poem for a while, never really got around to writing it down. Again, it's an abstract poem. I thought I'd try my hand at writing a tanka so this is what happened. Please comment! And be honest! I don't care if you hate it! I want to improve! 


ujmbled
jumbled my is brain
the understand I problem can't
maze because it's of words
you if unscramble but it
then really it's quite simple

2 comments:

  1. LOL I love it Quinn. I really don't have as much mastery over poetry as you have so I don't think I can help you improve. All I kno wis that you are very talented and gifted in poetry and writing. I'm sure some of the other poets will be dropping by soon and will give you a more deservi ng comment then I can.
    I'm glad yuo posted this!
    :D

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  2. Yay!

    Epic poem Quinn!!!

    Sorry for not commenting earlier, I've not been able to put how awesome this poem is, especially when read quickly so that the words seem less scrambled and then reading carefully and seeing how different it actually is, into words.

    LOVE IT!!!

    :D

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