Friday, 22 July 2011

dRuNK

Ok. I wrote another poem. But it's a bit different to what I usually write- this is what they call an abstract poem. This is my first go at this kind of thing, so I'm not sure how it turned out... And for the record- the dodgy spacing and lack of capitals/punctuation is meant to be there. So, tell me what you think. Did it work? Did it not? Should I never try abstract poetry again? Generic thoughts? You know. The usual.


Oh- and another thing. I'm sorry if it's not very accurate... I don't have much experience, so I was just trying to make it up. I'm not sure how that went. Yeah.


Anyway... I present to you...


dRuNK


she took a sip

another

another

eventually the whole bottle was gone

she didn’t

care

there was too much hurt to

care

she wanted anything that would make her forget

she wanted to

live

again

she wanted to be

happy

again

she didn’t want to care about the

pain

and the

hurt

but that seemed all she could do

care about the

pain

and the

hurt

‘give me another’

she said

and the cold glass was placed in front of her

the intoxicating fluid

my relief

she thought

my cure

she thought

‘it’s over’

he’d said

‘that’s fine’

she’d said

two lies

no truth

it wasn’t over

in fact

it had

only

just

begun

6 comments:

  1. Fantastic poem Quinn. I don't know anything really about poetry. But I know that this wone is very unique in style and message and I like it!
    It's sad.

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  2. It's a really great poem, Quin. Really sad and the way it is written is quite interesting. I like it

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  3. Coolio poem Quinn!

    It's very good, really portrays the message.

    And the title is ePiCA!!!

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  4. I like it too. I love it in fact. EPICA.

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  5. This poem is very awesome and sad and amazing.

    You are so talented.

    Great piece of abstract poetry.

    e.e cummings would love it! :D

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  6. oh
    my
    wizard
    frakking
    god

    Quinn, I usually rather dislike poetry (blame my english teacher :@ ) but this is... this is... marvellous, quite frankly!


    ((and on another note - have you been hacking my computer and reading my notes! It fits so well with a story I'm working on its scary))

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