Ok. I wrote another poem. But it's a bit different to what I usually write- this is what they call an abstract poem. This is my first go at this kind of thing, so I'm not sure how it turned out... And for the record- the dodgy spacing and lack of capitals/punctuation is meant to be there. So, tell me what you think. Did it work? Did it not? Should I never try abstract poetry again? Generic thoughts? You know. The usual.
Oh- and another thing. I'm sorry if it's not very accurate... I don't have much experience, so I was just trying to make it up. I'm not sure how that went. Yeah.
Anyway... I present to you...
dRuNK
she took a sip
another
another
eventually the whole bottle was gone
she didn’t
care
there was too much hurt to
care
she wanted anything that would make her forget
she wanted to
live
again
she wanted to be
happy
again
she didn’t want to care about the
pain
and the
hurt
but that seemed all she could do
care about the
pain
and the
hurt
‘give me another’
she said
and the cold glass was placed in front of her
the intoxicating fluid
my relief
she thought
my cure
she thought
‘it’s over’
he’d said
‘that’s fine’
she’d said
two lies
no truth
it wasn’t over
in fact
it had
only
just
begun
It's a really great poem, Quin. Really sad and the way it is written is quite interesting. I like it
ReplyDeleteCoolio poem Quinn!
ReplyDeleteIt's very good, really portrays the message.
And the title is ePiCA!!!
I like it too. I love it in fact. EPICA.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is very awesome and sad and amazing.
ReplyDeleteYou are so talented.
Great piece of abstract poetry.
e.e cummings would love it! :D
oh
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wizard
frakking
god
Quinn, I usually rather dislike poetry (blame my english teacher :@ ) but this is... this is... marvellous, quite frankly!
((and on another note - have you been hacking my computer and reading my notes! It fits so well with a story I'm working on its scary))